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the consequences of walking in circles

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July 12, 2013
the consequences of walking in circles by ~MozartsNemesis slowly builds until the beautiful ending lines of dialogue, which make me want to cry for reasons I can't even describe in words, the suggester tells us.
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The lady wore black and her eyes shone gold,
veiled face and veiled intentions, a smile
in her right hand, a dagger in her left.
Slicing with either in confident stride
like the sea-breeze slices across the morning air
and the ocean of her heart bled,

beckoning with wave after wave of depths untold.
When first I gazed upon lascivious lips, I pined
for the days of old, I dreamed of songbirds.
I spoke in languages forgotten. (or maybe never learned.)
I learned quickly the dark plays tricks on the mind.

She spoke, her voice was a shadow on the night's breeze
carried away on a landslide of eluvium. Her teeth were sharp,
and strangely intoxicating. Her scent, like gentlest whispers,
spoke to me of nurture and reminded me of death.
Her pupils were impossibly large. She smiled,

and I felt my will unfold like petals and fall away like leaves.
She stripped me of my outer bark, it fell away in clods of excuses.
I was adrift in an illusion of confusion. And her final wispy words
still echo in what is left of my ears.

"Hang him from the ceiling fan.
He was only going in circles to begin with."
A huge thank you to the lovely LaColumbededeuil [link] This is a collaboration sorts, she gave me four lines, and told me to run with it. This is what I came up with.

Let me know what ya'll think!

Also, there is voice recording of me reading this poem here. [link]
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Lintu47's avatar
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart: