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The lady wore black and her eyes shone gold,
veiled face and veiled intentions, a smile
in her right hand, a dagger in her left.
Slicing with either in confident stride
like the sea-breeze slices across the morning air
and the ocean of her heart bled,

beckoning with wave after wave of depths untold.
When first I gazed upon lascivious lips, I pined
for the days of old, I dreamed of songbirds.
I spoke in languages forgotten. (or maybe never learned.)
I learned quickly the dark plays tricks on the mind.

She spoke, her voice was a shadow on the night's breeze
carried away on a landslide of eluvium. Her teeth were sharp,
and strangely intoxicating. Her scent, like gentlest whispers,
spoke to me of nurture and reminded me of death.
Her pupils were impossibly large. She smiled,

and I felt my will unfold like petals and fall away like leaves.
She stripped me of my outer bark, it fell away in clods of excuses.
I was adrift in an illusion of confusion. And her final wispy words
still echo in what is left of my ears.

"Hang him from the ceiling fan.
He was only going in circles to begin with."
A huge thank you to the lovely LaColumbededeuil [link] This is a collaboration sorts, she gave me four lines, and told me to run with it. This is what I came up with.

Let me know what ya'll think!

Also, there is voice recording of me reading this poem here. [link]
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Given 2013-07-12
the consequences of walking in circles by ~MozartsNemesis slowly builds until the beautiful ending lines of dialogue, which make me want to cry for reasons I can't even describe in words, the suggester tells us. ( Suggested by intricately-ordinary and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Whoa... that is quite creepy, yet it flows impossibly well.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Thanks I think? Lol.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student General Artist
:hug: You're welcome!
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Savaliste Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
YAY! CONGRATZ, A DAILY DEVIATION!!!! :iconbravoplz: :party:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
thank you so much! I love the clapping guy lol
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Kiba-Shiruba Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Student General Artist
:iconthisdeanplz:*speechless*
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Aelorn Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
My eyes are watering a little. My friends always say I write great poetry, but this is... Masterful. This is up there with the greats. One day, children will be forced to study your poetry in English classes.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
I don't even know what to say to this except thank you.. this comment just made my day.
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Aelorn Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
No problem! I look forward to my children studying you.
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