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Take heed, ye men of government:
your britches grow too small.
You strive to touch the firmament
but your sprawling empire shall fall.

Youe horses will but trample you,
your men shall toil in vain.
Your eggshell ideals will hinder you
from putting your kingdom together again.

When I was young my mother told me
"Son walk with careful stride.
There is a time for humility,
and a time for patriot pride."

As I grow older I'm losing faith
in presidential ability.
To the corrupt,the immoral, I sayeth
remember Humpty Dumpty.
I couldn't enter the PoetryvstheWorld contest, as I was judging a portion of it, but I really liked the prompt they had for the green round of the contest.. this is my take on that prompt: The fall of Government.
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LaColombeDeDeuil Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Professional General Artist
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~~ This is an incredible piece of work with such insight it is amazing! You are turning into a master poet my dear friend. May the Lord continue to bless you in your efforts because He has given you quite a gift. This will be featured on my DA ID page as well as on Facebook. GREAT JOB! ~~

always,
katti
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ArrowModo Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
Back-up account!

This is excellent. If you had entered the Contest, I'm sure you would've blown past others. Your word choice is great, as *Medoriko pointed out. Wonderful job, Sir.

You ought to join our next contest, in may. The theme is Despair. We would be looking forward to seeing you, Sir.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
I really appreciate your kind comment..and I look forward to joining the next contest. I'm not sure about blowing past others, I'm sure the entries for this round will be top notch. Thanks again!
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ArrowModo Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
I hope you join, Sir. And I'm certain you would've done well had you joined... but then we would've had no judge. :XD:
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
I like this a lot. It has a powerful message without being sounding like you're on your soap box. Your word choice really sets the message home. My favorite parts are the first two lines and the last two. They both set the poem up nicely AND closes it well. Well done
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
Thank you for your kind words. I really am glad to know I came across as sincere rather than like I was posturing. I think the first two lines are my favorite as well. Thanks again. :)
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Writer
No problem :heart: Keep up the great work~
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