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Tears stream down your face
like holy water, searing skin,
blessed by old, forgotten truths
and cheeks of rosy porcelain.

Solitary thoughts stand out,
like winter's barren trees.
Tainted with corruption by
the cyst of your deficiencies

and the tumor of your discontents,
(I don't care to excise them by name.)
Sarcoma to sarcophagus,
they're buried much the same.

For what you cannot bear to say
is swallowed by the dark
and swampy waters of your soul,
ignored, to leave their mark.

2.
Tears crowd in your eyes and threaten
quick to stain your cheek.
Pure emotion, unresolved,
exhausts your will to speak.

Serene smile lifts the hopes
of those who stand beside you.
Happiness that knows no bounds,
at last explodes inside you.

The corners of your starry eyes
lend proof to outward signs
of joy that comes in rivulets
and leaves in salty lines.



No matter what the reason be
that cause your eyes to swell,
there is a sacredness in tears
that each of us know well.
"There is a sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They speak more eloquently than ten thousand tongues. They are messengers of overwhelming grief...and unspeakable joy"
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ravingroshie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Such a joy to read, rhythm is fantastic and so is the rhyme. I would take a few words out so the syllables are the same because I'm an annoying perfectionist haha. This is pure genius though
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013
Thank you so much. I'll read back through it, and try to figure out where it doesnt quite fit so well.
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LaColombeDeDeuil Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Professional General Artist
:snowflake::rose::snowflake:

tears are the wishes our hearts have made that the angels hear and are for joy in the fulfillment thereof or for sadness in the lack of its granting - precious they are - so much so that it says He knows the count of them and captures them up. salt-water reminders of the first time the heavens cried for so long all was covered. then made new and fresh, sweet smelling and blessed. tears are not a sign of weakness in a man to me, they are a sign he is so sure of his manhood he does not deny his humanity. you are amazing Jake.

always,
katti
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
Thank you so much!
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Parsat Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
And apologies for the double post, but I believe in the last line, "knows" is the proper verb form instead of "know."
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Parsat Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
This was a wonderful work of art! You blend emotion and imagery, allusion and illusion in the perfect amounts.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful.
I mean, it took my breath away on my first read through.

I don't often incorporate rhyme schemes into my poems, but it worked perfectly for this. Your imagery is spectacular, especially in that gripping first stanza.
"and the tumor of your discontents,
(I don't care to excise them by name.)
Sarcoma to sarcophagus,
they're buried much the same."
I love the harsh truth presented in this stanza.

And, even more so, I love the beautiful message that resolved it. It ends so wonderfully, I love the quote you include in your description. You present such a positive and heartwarming idea without sounding the least bit campy or cliched, which is a talent I am entirely jealous of.

I think that's such a lovely state of mind and it's written in such a natural, touching way.
I wish I could fave this multiple times.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
Thank you so much for such kindness. I find it..striking that you were able to pull the lines from this which I used to center the whole poem around. the last two lines of that stanza have been echoing through my head for days. I'm glad I came across as genuine rather than corny.. I worry about that sometimes, because often as poet.. it is hard to find multiple ways to express the same idea, or capture the same emotion. Again, thank you for the fave, and for commenting so kindly.. it makes it worthwhile to have lived through those tears if their end product can touch even one person.
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