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Tomorrow,
provided that when morning rolls around
the dulcet sky is not hewn and falling
like calamity around my neck,
and the ground is not rent with grief
or torn asunder with greed,
and the ocean has not swallowed me up
and left me hidden within her tides,

tomorrow I will love you still.


When the sudden sun sneaks
like a thief across the horizon
and steals your face from my fitful slumber,
I will stretch and remember Summer days
and the sweet aroma of your smile.

If deep within the mountain-dark night
my demons have encamped around me
and drawn pictures of tragedy in my mind's eye,
I will think of the softness of your hands,
the trusting heaviness of your whispered secrets.

I have made myself a liar.

Tomorrow,
Even if I woke with a millstone tied around my neck,
and the ground opened up a chasm to swallow me,
and if the sea rose up around me,
then I would sing your saltwater praises.

Tomorrow,
I will love you still.
Written in a bus station in Nashville. :)
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your fantastic work has been featured here!
I'd really appreciate it if you could give some love to the other featured pieces and :+fav: the journal! :heart:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
Thank you so much! I will certainly visit and fave and comment. Thanks again!
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :) And thanks for doing so!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I found this piece to be very powerful! It captured me in your lovely imagery, and I read earnestly! Where you broke your lines just seems perfect, and I absolutely adored the way you described everything!

"...provided that when morning rolls around
the dulcet sky is not hewn and falling
like calamity around my neck..."


This is just beautiful! The whole concept was quite intriguing!


"I have made myself a liar."

You've said so much here using so little. It really packed a punch upon reading it, and although I loved the refrain of this poem, I quite enjoyed this line the most. I admire you for your power to write such words.

This whole poem is just beautiful in the feelings you put into it. There is such tender love and a powerful sense of hope that I personally feel is being shoved into the hands of the reader. What an inspiring thought and what a beautiful way of trying to give that hope... because you wish to give it even at the sacrifice of yourself.
You indeed have a gift! :love: this was a pleasure to read.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
You just made my week with this comment. I'm really glad to know it worked..I wrote it quickly. I was on a 28 hour bus ride, and we stopped in Nashville..I wrote it in the bus terminal. It's for a dear friend of mine, one I love fiercely. She is not for me, but it doesn't change the way I feel. Im glad you enjoyed that line, I was hoping it'd be a stark contrast to the rest of it, though I worried because it didn't exactly fit with the rest of the poem. Thank you again for the fave, and for your kind words.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I envy you! I can never write unless I am in solitude or unless I am particularly upset. For being written so quickly, I think it is even more lovely then! :love:
I always should think more before I speak, in case I bring up old wounds... but I really love the reasons behind your writing. You write with substance--with truth. You are not afraid to write it how it is (even if you try to cloak a few things with similes and metaphors), and I admire you for this! I think that is probably what makes your poetry so memorable to me: your voice.

I wouldn't worry too much about that line, I thought the contrast actually worked wonders. It addresses a conflict before resolving itself in the refrain. It does change the tone of the poem a little, because we as readers realize loving this person has not been easy; the road has been rid with obstacles that you have scarred and grown from. I don't know.. I really wish I could explain why I loved that particular line so much, but I have no words. It was simply beautiful perhaps in the fact it was simple.

You are most definitely welcome! I'm also glad I made your week! What a a lovely thing to hear: I love being able to compliment people and show someone how much I appreciate their work :D I'm just relieved it seemed to be enough: My words always feel insufficient.
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AestheticallyCraved Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: I will admit I know nothing much of writing poetry, however, surely enjoyed reading this poem. Much appreciation for sharing this :love:
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013
Lovely, the imagery, word choice and emotion gives this poem a flavor and a scent not easily forgotten.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013
Thank you so much for the fave and the kind words. This was written for a dear friend of mine.. to pull her through a difficult time.
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013
You are so welcome! I hope you reached your friend with the same positive impact you've reached others.
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LaColombeDeDeuil Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Professional General Artist
:blackrose::blackrose:

~~ I know a secret, I know from whence the muse gathered this information. And I must say, it is AWESOME! You are featured! ~~~

always,
katti
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
thank you so much dearest!
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wizillusions Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My favorite lines:

When the sudden sun sneaks
like a thief across the horizon
and steals your face from my fitful slumber,
I will stretch and remember Summer days
and the sweet aroma of your smile.

:+fav: So very well written.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
Thanks so much for the fave!
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
"When the sudden sun sneaks
like a thief across the horizon
and steals you face from my fitful slumber,
I will stretch and remember Summer days
and the sweet aroma of your smile."

Absolutely beautiful. You've done such a wonderful job, and I love this poem. :heart:
The imagery was powerful and I could relate so well to this piece. Keep up the good work :clap:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013
Thank you so much for the favorite, and your kind words. They mean so much. :D
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singagainsoon Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're quite welcome c:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013
I was attempting to make it coalesce with the first stanza, and portray that even if the world tried to destroy me, if my hope was lost, my love would remain. I like it, and I think im probably gonna stick with it.
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Parsat Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013   Writer
The millstone reference from the Bible is about causing little children to sin (Matthew 18:5-6). I realize now that it wasn't your intention, but it's still hard to get that connection out of my head.
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
oh man, i didnt even think of that reference. I visited a mill the other day.. and the stones were so big. I was thinking more of it as a crushing weight, but I can see where you would get the Bible reference.
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Parsat Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013   Writer
Ah, okay. Cool!
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Parsat Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013   Writer
I liked it until the second to last stanza...the millstone reference just gave it another flavor that wasn't right.
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